22h
Revision·334 min·1,000 words
A full manuscript audit and an intenstive round of revisions to bring a weak scene up to par.
Shail + Trisan“Biopunk”
Activity
A full manuscript audit and an intenstive round of revisions to bring a weak scene up to par.
Another polish on this scene 35. Mostly cutting. Softened the children. Nicer. Less predatory.
New draft scene 37.5 to create a counterpoint perspective of the IT from Trisan's at school vantage point.
This scene and the previous one has the same flashback told two different ways. I had to cut it from the first scene and insert into the second, keeping much of both but interweaving with the correct order. It became a larger block but with rich detail. The end of the frame links to the flashback in a (I hope) resonant way.
Scene 32 now finished for the Author revision round. Managed to coin a term in this scene. Love the ending.
Scene 32 needs changes to the tone, which is too upbeat and even flippant. Shifting to somber with more backstory. Elevante and align the stakes.
Next scene for the IT parallel subplot. Lots of discarding some things and expanding other things. Every time i do a revision sweep, a lot gets changed.
Got a lot done over two scenes. Revisions. Progress fixing glitches in the timeline. Dates. Continuity. Scene Order.
Reframed scene 29 with a new setting. Cut another scene before this one that was not adding anything and repeated text i've moved to the first scene of the book.
Big day on one scene, which is now in good shape.
3 scenes revised today. Making excellent progress. Feeling really good about how the plot is moving. The beats are aligning nicely. Every revision adds more interconnections. Exactly what I want from my revisions.
Scene 21. Revised and deepened. Several subplots tied in better.
Perhaps the biggest scene in the book revised and complete.